I have a lot of goals for this paper. I want to actually go back through and almost rewrite my paper. I feel that I took the wrong approach at it and did the summarizing one paragraph then summarizing the other and then comparing. Which is a habit we are trying to get out of. I think that a lot that I wrote I could still use, but I need to move it around a lot. I need to focus on having better claims for my paragraphs and then supporting them throughout the paper instead of wandering off to a different idea. I want to also focus on sentence structure, grammar, and word choice. I want to go back through my quotes and make sure that I’m only using ones that will support my thesis.

First, what I need to do is go back through my paper and rewrite it. I feel like this step takes priority because if I do other steps before it, it would be pointless. To do this I will go through my paper and break it down and come up with better claims for each paragraph. I will then use different sentences from my first draft and try to make them all flow and fit together. I feel that I need to have stronger claims, then work my writing around that. Once I have stronger claims and paragraphs I can go back through and find quotes that support my claim. I want my paragraphs to be more mixed in my second draft this time. I want them all to relate more. I feel that in my first draft they were all a little separate and don’t connect well with each other. Once I have stronger claims and evidence it will only make my paper stronger and support my thesis even more.

I feel that my biggest struggle is grammar. I feel that is something really easy to fix though. So another big struggle that I’m facing is, trying to put the right information into the right paragraphs. At this point I feel like I need to start over and rewrite my paper in a different perspective. I feel like this is going to be struggle for me and may make me frustrated but I will take it one paragraph at a time and work on it. I feel that if I don’t try to fix it all in a day it will help me look through it all slower and it will produce better paragraphs.

If a challenge comes up through out my writing, I could always look into the little seagull book for help because it is very straightforward and has a lot of great information. I could email my teacher and ask for advice. I could have my roommate read my paper aloud to me, and maybe I could see where I was going wrong. I could also go to SASC to look for extra help.