I feel like this could fall under ideas, “Introduce this differently maybe you could try saying things like: In accordance to, regarding, in reference to. Makes the quote flow better with the paper.” I feel like this fits into organization because I am giving her some ideas that she could use to make her paper better and flow easier. Sometimes it’s hard to see these things when you’ re reading your own paper.

I feel that this could go under evidence, the author wrote, “As Zander described, being powerful includes helping others to be their best.” And I felt that if the she went on to state how she felt about it and her opinion on it, it would only back her paper up even more. What does she define as power and what does she think makes someone powerful?

I feel like this could go under organization, In a paragraphs above the authors paragraph was talking all about music, but two paragraphs later she had a very good point that involved music. I suggested that she move that sentence up because I thought it would fit better and make more since.   

I feel like this was a very helpful step in my writing process. While reading though these essays I was able to see somethings that they could work on to make their papers better and then I thought about my paper and realized that I had been making some of the same mistakes. This kind of opens your eyes and gives you a new look at you paper in so many ways. When you go back to your paper you can look for some of those mistakes you saw previously. And not only, when reading though other peoples essays it gives you new point of views and ideas to write about, some that you may of never thought about writing before. I think that this process will definitely help me fore when I go back and revise my paper. At first while writing comments I was a little nervous and didn’t want to sound rude or that I didn’t like their writing. But then I felt like everyone was on the same page with the comments situation especially after talking about it in class. After realizing this, I was able to read through the essays and give back honest comments that I felt would be helpful and only make the essay better.